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Laura's avatar

I thought she wasn't and he was. I, too, liked the opening line!

Dascha Paylor 🇨🇦🍁🐻‍❄'s avatar

Good work. Maybe it was too obvious or maybe you're smarter than the average ghoul.

Bill Adler's avatar

"Coleta dropped in on the Halloween party despite not having been invited." This is a great first sentence, and the story only got better from there.

Connie Earhart's avatar

Gotcha! 😂

Justin Deming's avatar

I thought she was a vampire after the second paragraph and then questioned whether or not he was the remainder of the story. The ending still surprised me, though! Great job, Dascha!

Dascha Paylor 🇨🇦🍁🐻‍❄'s avatar

It was meant to keep readers uncertain. Mission accomplished. Thanks, Justin.